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this is a sonnet I wrote, but really needs some work- I'm not sure how to fix it up. any help would be great, as long as you know how ...

) and foreboding dark forest that wrapped around the periphery of the town like a finger this phrase should be changed, maybe to and the foreboding dark forest that wrapped ...

In the first line of the third stanza: why did you cut out the syllable in 'ev'ry'? You don't need to cut a syllable, so 'every' would work just as ...

So I wrote this for english class this weekend and am rather pleased with it. It is a Shakespearean sonnet, so the format is very strict. I don't know for ...

tall,brunette and green eyes that's what it says to me

5/10

4/10

Gears turning slowly, tumblers not working I sit, my hand on my head, glaring at the riddle I can't give up, it will hover in my mind until I relent ...

very short, I know an attempt at some rhymes....yeah ---------------------------------------- Raised voices ignore the walls between us and envelope me in a cloud of gloom, Each angry tone and bitter ...

So this is a short story that I wrote for a contest last year. The limit was 600 words which is why it's so short. All reviews are welcome! 2. ...

9/10 love it!

9/10 love it

7/10 True, but not always

First off, it's a poem don't go into the psychology of it because THAT'S NOT THE POINT second, you totally contradicted yourself by first saying that everyone is normal and ...

from its sheath at her flank flank is a very horsey word to use, I would use something like calf or thigh What passes Jerome? This is clearly not the ...